浣溪沙---------中秋思佳人

月满霜天 · 发表于 2006-10-10 18:55:48

美人如花笑云端，恼恨青鸟不传言．江南思客问婵娟．从此清辉逐夜减，为谁辛苦为谁圆？又是一夜不成眠．

才尽更断笔 · 发表于 2006-10-10 19:11:25

略有出律。

月满霜天 · 发表于 2006-10-10 19:25:19

词的格律好难的~~要想写的好,又要不出律~~~唉!!!!!

才尽更断笔 · 发表于 2006-10-10 19:58:59

呵呵，难中求精，也是一种乐趣啊！

月满霜天 · 发表于 2006-10-10 20:07:07

难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那难那

amonk · 发表于 2006-10-10 22:54:33

太夸张了吧----------------------------

amonk · 发表于 2006-10-10 22:55:59

::: 在月满霜天的贴子提到 :::
从此清辉逐夜减

好句！清奇！！！！！

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